Reality Check by Dave Whamond for February 09, 2022

What person would reads that?

I don’t think he’ll have any luck with this book.

Did Dave go incognito for the book, Dave?

The end.

Hey, that’s Dave Whamond!

Sounds like the theory of relativity.

He already wrote in the First Person and Third Person, but what about the Second Person? For that’s how those “Choose Your Own Adventure” books are written.

He gets paid by the word…

It’s all relative (Einstein said that).

Two unnecessary steps here: the teacher’s sister’s aunt would also be the teacher’s aunt (unless perhaps she was a step sister.) And the aunt’s brother would be the teacher’s uncle. His niece might be the teacher’s cousin (or even the teacher’s sister) but not necessarily.

The top part is way too legible.

Lost me after uncle

I’ve gotten to a point at which I despise books written in the first person. So much of the dialogue has too many “I’s,” and it gets really tiresome.

Or, “What I heard at coffee this morning.”

Hey, reminds me of family listings in The Old Testament.

My 10 year old nephew was given a sheet of paper and was told to summarize his first day in Paris, France. He filled the page with the following:

“We went for a walk today and we walked and walked and walked and walked and walked and walked … and walked!”

[Dark Helmet] “I am your father’s brother’s nephew’s cousin’s former roommate!”

[Lone Starr] " . . . What’s that make us?"

[Dark Helmet] “Absolutely nothing!”

— Spaceballs

Someone one else to blame for shoddy storylines and conversations.

Shades of Lone Star meets Dark Helmet. (“Space Balls”)

Doesn’t matter how many relationships he adds, it’s still being written in the third person.

Good way to fill up space

Dave should write it in Arabic. That’s a language that has pronouns specifically for addressing two people for some reason.