Off the Mark by Mark Parisi for September 23, 2012

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    BRI-NO-MITE!! Premium Member about 12 years ago

    Rube Goldberg would be proud.

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    margueritem  about 12 years ago

    Wonderful imagination, I’d give him an A-, too.

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    pouncingtiger  about 12 years ago

    I’m surprised that there shouldn’t be a comma in that long sentence.

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    orinoco womble  about 12 years ago

    As my old journalism prof used to say, "When you get to the second comma or the third “and”, stop and start again."

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    Bill Chapman  about 12 years ago

    I actually taped a D&D game I and my friends played one night and wrote it out as a fictional story I was assigned to write in English class. Got me an A…..The teacher never knew how I actually wrote the story.

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    i_am_the_jam  about 12 years ago

    Not bad…

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    Devils Knight  about 12 years ago

    what would have made this better is small panels in the beginning showing that it really happened

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    DanReynolds  about 12 years ago

    He got an A- because he forgot to sign his name.

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    Stephen Gilberg  about 12 years ago

    I count 48 words with no punctuation between them.

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    hippogriff  about 12 years ago

    Orinoco: You have to use more than two commas when describing a list. (Showing a list is a slightly different matter.) Format is a major factor in these rules.

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    gobblingup Premium Member about 12 years ago

    I would say that he needs more descriptive words, and he would have gotten a higher grade.

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